Growth as a Poet
Growth as a Poet
Throughout the writing of my poem my perspective didn’t change too much. The basic idea of my poem was that power does not corrupt people, people corrupt power. From the start of my poem to the final version, the main perspective remained the same. However, I do feel that my poem became more sophisticated, throughout the various drafts of my writing. I also feel that I conveyed my message in a deeper and more poetic way. One example of how my writing improved would be,
‘’Power in its self is not a fucking bad thing
If it was, then explain mother fucking Gandhi’’
evolved into,
“Is not poison to the mind,
It is not acts of selfishness
It is not a game twisting thoughts of our leaders
If it was, then explain mother fucking Gandhi.”
From these two examples of my poetry, it is evident that my depth and word use improved drastically.
The first thing that made my writing better was how my writing changed from an essay format into more of a poem. At first I started out with simple lines like,
“Power used it for good,
Inspiration for them minds of the god damn world.”
I chose this sentence because it clearly demonstrates the simplicity of my starting poem. From my boring sentences, I grew to more lines like,
“Power is the connection of people
Power is putting others before yourself
Power is standing for what is right
Power is inspiration for the minds of the world”
Instead of stating what I wanted to say, I found ways to make my langue more poetic, and strengthen my poem. Adding more than the obvious lines created a deeper emotional and intellectual impact by allowing me to communicate my perspective of power more clearly.
The second thing that I found to be an important change, was my amount of cursing in the first poem. When I was first writing my poem, I had no idea where to begin, so the first result ended up just turning into a highly unorganized rant. The lines,
“Inspiration for them minds of the god damn world
Weary of people bitching and blaming their actions on others
Refusal to take any fucking responsibility”
strongly conveys the amount of cursing that was first demonstrated in my poem. I felt it necessary to take out the cursing because it took away from my perspective or message. The curse words were a distracting part that made my writing into more of a poem than a rant. Taking out the curse words really benefited my poem, for example,
“Power is inspiration for the minds of the world
The world should be weary
Weary of people blaming their actions on others
Refusal to take responsibility”
When I took out the curse words, there wasn’t anything stopping me from conveying my perspective. My lacking in use of curse words also resulted in me being able to use words that better fit the poetic ways.
The final change that I found to be important for my poem improvements was adding repetition into my poem.
“Power used it for good”
I changed this part of my poem because I found it very boring and extremely un descriptive.
“Power is the connection of people
Power is putting others before yourself
Power is standing for what is right
Power is inspiration for the minds of the world”
Adding repetition not only added a poetic device to my poem but its added substance as well. Instead of having an explaining statement, the repetition creates a rhythm with my writing, pushing me to go deeper with ideas.
Throughout the writing of my poem my perspective didn’t change too much. The basic idea of my poem was that power does not corrupt people, people corrupt power. From the start of my poem to the final version, the main perspective remained the same. However, I do feel that my poem became more sophisticated, throughout the various drafts of my writing. I also feel that I conveyed my message in a deeper and more poetic way. One example of how my writing improved would be,
‘’Power in its self is not a fucking bad thing
If it was, then explain mother fucking Gandhi’’
evolved into,
“Is not poison to the mind,
It is not acts of selfishness
It is not a game twisting thoughts of our leaders
If it was, then explain mother fucking Gandhi.”
From these two examples of my poetry, it is evident that my depth and word use improved drastically.
The first thing that made my writing better was how my writing changed from an essay format into more of a poem. At first I started out with simple lines like,
“Power used it for good,
Inspiration for them minds of the god damn world.”
I chose this sentence because it clearly demonstrates the simplicity of my starting poem. From my boring sentences, I grew to more lines like,
“Power is the connection of people
Power is putting others before yourself
Power is standing for what is right
Power is inspiration for the minds of the world”
Instead of stating what I wanted to say, I found ways to make my langue more poetic, and strengthen my poem. Adding more than the obvious lines created a deeper emotional and intellectual impact by allowing me to communicate my perspective of power more clearly.
The second thing that I found to be an important change, was my amount of cursing in the first poem. When I was first writing my poem, I had no idea where to begin, so the first result ended up just turning into a highly unorganized rant. The lines,
“Inspiration for them minds of the god damn world
Weary of people bitching and blaming their actions on others
Refusal to take any fucking responsibility”
strongly conveys the amount of cursing that was first demonstrated in my poem. I felt it necessary to take out the cursing because it took away from my perspective or message. The curse words were a distracting part that made my writing into more of a poem than a rant. Taking out the curse words really benefited my poem, for example,
“Power is inspiration for the minds of the world
The world should be weary
Weary of people blaming their actions on others
Refusal to take responsibility”
When I took out the curse words, there wasn’t anything stopping me from conveying my perspective. My lacking in use of curse words also resulted in me being able to use words that better fit the poetic ways.
The final change that I found to be important for my poem improvements was adding repetition into my poem.
“Power used it for good”
I changed this part of my poem because I found it very boring and extremely un descriptive.
“Power is the connection of people
Power is putting others before yourself
Power is standing for what is right
Power is inspiration for the minds of the world”
Adding repetition not only added a poetic device to my poem but its added substance as well. Instead of having an explaining statement, the repetition creates a rhythm with my writing, pushing me to go deeper with ideas.